6/05/2012

Tantalizing Tuesday # 6 - Sylvie

Welcome to a new Tantalizing Tuesday! 
Here's a flash of a different sort for you....


Sylvie

Her eyes sparkle with humorous challenge; her lips spread in a teasing smile. Everyone stares at her, but my eyes fall to the tickets she tossed on the table.
People look at us, not knowing if she's serious. I can't force the words she wants through my tight throat. My palms dampen, icy sweat drips down my spine. The girls from our office laugh. They think it's a joke. Part of me does too. Sylvia is way beyond me. She's pretty, smart...courageous.
The light in her eyes dims, but her smile's wider, and I see her confidence in me is shaken. Unable to speak, I lean over the table and kiss her.
The little harpy inside who's been telling me Sylvie's just messing with me, rests control of my soul and I jerk away. My lashes drift shut and I swallow hard.
The laughter dies. The "Haha I was just fooling" never comes.
I pry reluctant lids open and meet her gaze again.
The sparkle's back. The girls are making plans for shopping...because it looks like Sylvie and I are eloping.
Minutes after I should have spoken, the words I choked on last night burst forth. "Yes. I love you."

Copyright © 2010, 2011, 2012 by Lee Brazil
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16 comments:

  1. This is different, Lee. And I loved it. "I pry reluctant lids open...." a delicious teaser. I couldn't figure out where you were taking me until nearly the end and I so enjoyed the ride from the very first line. Beautiful reluctance and shy restraint. He's been hurt before?:) xo

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  2. Good story-telling, l could feel his lack of self-esteem. She obviously loves him back - sweet post.

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  3. Very different and yet so poignant - "Yes, I love you." Says so much and no more truly needs to be uttered. I love it

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  4. This has a different feel to it than the original version, but still captures her insecurity and trembling hope. Thank God Silvie didn't laugh! A very vulnerable moment. That kiss took courage.

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  5. Am I the only one to think that it's not a HE but a SHE who kissed Sylvie? Maybe I'm wrong though.. Either way, it's beautiful and sweet.
    Great post

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  6. I got a little confused on the timing, and like Jade, I wasn't sure of the gender of the POV character. It's very engaging though!

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  7. Wow! The build up was intense.

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  8. Very intense tease. You've left me with so many questions!

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  9. Excellent tease. Great crescendo from the tossed cards up to the opening eyelids. I love it

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  10. Yes a she...a very vulnerable she that is breathtakingly in love...*sighs* you always get me with your flashes Lee...*hugs*

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  11. That was cute. I really enjoyed your teaser!

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  12. Lee, once again you've got my head spinning. Wow, what just happened? Ok, so "tease" is the right word, I have been teased and tormented. Well, I hope he gets it right, because Sylvie is freaking gorgeous.

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  13. Wow!!! Loved this one Lee! Always love your teases. You write so beautifully.

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